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zero 09-04-2005 10:07 AM

bonto
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by edward de bono
..i decided to invent my own poetic form



  • the rhyme is a a b b

  • the first line describes some action. this action should be unexpected or bizarre enough to attract attention. the action may be performed by a known and named person. when this is the case, then the action should fit the personality. the action is fictitious and does not need to be historic.

  • the second line explains and gives the reason behind the action. this explanation should be as logical as possible. the more bizarre the action, the more logical the explanation should be.

  • the third line gives the result of the action. what happens? again, this result should follow as a logical consequence of the action.

  • the fourth and final line is a general philosophical reflection on life - but arising from the previous lines. The trick is to make the reflection follow smoothly from the action and yet be general in nature. This fourth line must be capable of standing on its own and making sense on its own.

  • example:

    i switched off my brain
    to see what I could gain.
    i lost the will to care.
    it's best to stay aware.



he shaded his eyes with a hand



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Marcus Bales 09-04-2005 01:06 PM

he shaded his eyes with a hand
he took from the corpse on the sand

trisherina 09-04-2005 02:16 PM

he shaded his eyes with a hand
he took from the corpse on the sand
now there'd be no more debate

Marcus Bales 09-04-2005 02:26 PM

he shaded his eyes with a hand
he took from the corpse on the sand
now there'd be no more debate
over who'd lost more weight

zero 09-04-2005 06:50 PM

anxious, early, overdressed

Marcus Bales 09-04-2005 07:09 PM

anxious, early, overdressed
but young and pretty, she impressed

zero 09-04-2005 07:43 PM

anxious, early, overdressed
but young and pretty, she impressed.
in her dotage she'd reminisce

Marcus Bales 09-04-2005 07:45 PM

anxious, early, overdressed
but young and pretty, she impressed.
in her dotage she'd reminisce
on the men she had managed to miss.

trisherina 09-04-2005 07:46 PM

anxious, early, overdressed
but young and pretty, she impressed.
in her dotage she'd reminisce
and all her old wounds would dehisce.

Marcus Bales 09-04-2005 07:50 PM

The opera, performed at the end of the alley

zero 09-04-2005 10:32 PM

The opera, performed at the end of the alley
was a forgery by seņor salvador dali

Marcus Bales 09-05-2005 12:12 AM

The opera, performed at the end of the alley
was a forgery by seņor salvador dali
the melted clocks hung off his surreal mustache

jasmina 09-05-2005 08:35 AM

The opera, performed at the end of the alley
was a forgery by seņor salvador dali
the melted clocks hung off his surreal mustache
It's disadvantageous to ignore a rash

Marcus Bales 09-05-2005 08:43 AM

With nothing but a piece of string

Hyakujo's Fox 09-05-2005 09:03 AM

With nothing but a piece of string
('twas the one darn thing I could swing)


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