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zefrank · 07-16-2003, 10:09 AM

Each haiku begins where the other ends:

1. I hope this form works
2. It would be embarrassing
3. if no one joined in
2. the war would have been over
3. long before now

i'll start:

1.long before now

moel · 07-16-2003, 10:14 AM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion

ambo · 07-16-2003, 01:10 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars

ze, great idea, but "long before now" ?

zefrank · 07-16-2003, 02:15 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90

in this version you take what you get...thought it appropriate to start where I left off

ambo · 07-16-2003, 04:02 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes

yeah but ze, bubbala, it's only four syllables

moel · 07-16-2003, 04:34 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes
2?.as daylight bleeds from the night

surflugen · 07-16-2003, 06:19 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes
2?.as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear

catbelly · 07-16-2003, 07:44 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes
2?.as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse

amanda · 07-16-2003, 09:06 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes
2?.as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise

zefrank · 07-16-2003, 11:49 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes
2?.as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise
2. my father's face in yellow

amanda · 07-17-2003, 09:41 PM

1.long before now
2.in times of great confusion
3.we looked to the stars
2.driving westward on 90
3.the sun in our eyes
2?.as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise
2. my father's face in yellow
3. campfire dreaming

moel · 07-19-2003, 09:43 AM

1. long before now
2. in times of great confusion
3. we looked to the stars
2. driving westward on 90
3. the sun in our eyes
2. as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise
2. my father's face in yellow
3. campfire dreaming
2. and the taste of marshmellows

amanda · 07-24-2003, 01:16 AM

1. long before now
2. in times of great confusion
3. we looked to the stars
2. driving westward on 90
3. the sun in our eyes
2. as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise
2. my father's face in yellow
3. campfire dreaming
2. and the taste of marshmellows
3. distant memories

zefrank · 07-24-2003, 03:33 PM

1. long before now
2. in times of great confusion
3. we looked to the stars
2. driving westward on 90
3. the sun in our eyes
2. as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise
2. my father's face in yellow
3. campfire dreaming
2. and the taste of marshmellows
3. distant memories
2. condense to their pure essence

moel · 07-27-2003, 05:05 PM

1. long before now
2. in times of great confusion
3. we looked to the stars
2. driving westward on 90
3. the sun in our eyes
2. as daylight bleeds from the night
3. I'm feeling no fear
2. although I miss my old horse
3. smoke and ashes rise
2. my father's face in yellow
3. campfire dreaming
2. and the taste of marshmellows
3. distant memories
2. condense to their pure essence
3. leaving only life

07-16-2003, 10:09 AM	#1
zefrank ------------- Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: brooklyn NY Posts: 1,581	Stitched haiku Each haiku begins where the other ends: 1. I hope this form works 2. It would be embarrassing 3. if no one joined in 2. the war would have been over 3. long before now i'll start: 1.long before now

07-16-2003, 01:10 PM	#3
ambo feline, naturally Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: California Posts: 4,407	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars ze, great idea, but "long before now" ? __________________ Non-violence leads to the highest ethics, which is the goal of all evolution. Until we have not stopped to include violence as an option in our conflict management, we are still savages. --Thomas A. Edison

07-16-2003, 04:02 PM	#5
ambo feline, naturally Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: California Posts: 4,407	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes yeah but ze, bubbala, it's only four syllables __________________ Non-violence leads to the highest ethics, which is the goal of all evolution. Until we have not stopped to include violence as an option in our conflict management, we are still savages. --Thomas A. Edison

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07-16-2003, 10:14 AM	#2
moel Registered User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: dithyramb Posts: 3,102	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion

07-16-2003, 02:15 PM	#4
zefrank ------------- Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: brooklyn NY Posts: 1,581	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 in this version you take what you get...thought it appropriate to start where I left off

07-16-2003, 04:34 PM	#6
moel Registered User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: dithyramb Posts: 3,102	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes 2?.as daylight bleeds from the night

07-16-2003, 06:19 PM	#7
surflugen getting Donuts Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Long Beach, CA Posts: 1,091	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes 2?.as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear

07-16-2003, 07:44 PM	#8
catbelly monkey Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: the north Posts: 1,757	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes 2?.as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse

07-16-2003, 09:06 PM	#9
amanda old s'cool Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,426	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes 2?.as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise

07-16-2003, 11:49 PM	#10
zefrank ------------- Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: brooklyn NY Posts: 1,581	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes 2?.as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise 2. my father's face in yellow

07-17-2003, 09:41 PM	#11
amanda old s'cool Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,426	1.long before now 2.in times of great confusion 3.we looked to the stars 2.driving westward on 90 3.the sun in our eyes 2?.as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise 2. my father's face in yellow 3. campfire dreaming

07-19-2003, 09:43 AM	#12
moel Registered User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: dithyramb Posts: 3,102	1. long before now 2. in times of great confusion 3. we looked to the stars 2. driving westward on 90 3. the sun in our eyes 2. as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise 2. my father's face in yellow 3. campfire dreaming 2. and the taste of marshmellows

07-24-2003, 01:16 AM	#13
amanda old s'cool Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 2,426	1. long before now 2. in times of great confusion 3. we looked to the stars 2. driving westward on 90 3. the sun in our eyes 2. as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise 2. my father's face in yellow 3. campfire dreaming 2. and the taste of marshmellows 3. distant memories

07-24-2003, 03:33 PM	#14
zefrank ------------- Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: brooklyn NY Posts: 1,581	1. long before now 2. in times of great confusion 3. we looked to the stars 2. driving westward on 90 3. the sun in our eyes 2. as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise 2. my father's face in yellow 3. campfire dreaming 2. and the taste of marshmellows 3. distant memories 2. condense to their pure essence

07-27-2003, 05:05 PM	#15
moel Registered User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: dithyramb Posts: 3,102	1. long before now 2. in times of great confusion 3. we looked to the stars 2. driving westward on 90 3. the sun in our eyes 2. as daylight bleeds from the night 3. I'm feeling no fear 2. although I miss my old horse 3. smoke and ashes rise 2. my father's face in yellow 3. campfire dreaming 2. and the taste of marshmellows 3. distant memories 2. condense to their pure essence 3. leaving only life