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zero · 12-06-2005, 08:23 PM

six sentences:

intro: setting + character
problem's set (clue happens)
action rises
climax
action falls
closing

zero · 12-06-2005, 08:24 PM

he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them stretch away into the gloom of the east wind.

trisherina · 12-06-2005, 08:32 PM

he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind.

Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside.

madasacutsnake · 12-06-2005, 10:11 PM

he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind.

Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside.

Upon opening the bottle he read, "Go immediately to the fish and chip shop on the front. There you will meet a man named Marion".

ambo · 12-06-2005, 10:19 PM

he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind.

Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside.

Upon opening the bottle he read, "Go immediately to the fish and chip shop on the front. There you will meet a man named Marion".

the blood pumped in his ears as he raced past the pastel homes on the marina, the voices in his head screaming "Marion, oh Marion, WHY ?"

12"razormix · 12-07-2005, 09:39 AM

he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind.

Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside.

Upon opening the bottle he read, "Go immediately to the fish and chip shop on the front. There you will meet a man named Marion".

the blood pumped in his ears as he raced past the pastel homes on the marina, the voices in his head screaming "Marion, oh Marion, WHY ?"

drawing nearer to the fish and chip shop, he recognized his son marion, leaning against the wooden pole near the entrance - "you're late again, dad, did you find my note?"

12-06-2005, 08:23 PM	#1
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	sudden stories six sentences: intro: setting + character problem's set (clue happens) action rises climax action falls closing

12-06-2005, 08:24 PM	#2
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them stretch away into the gloom of the east wind. Last edited by zero : 12-07-2005 at 05:20 AM.

12-06-2005, 08:32 PM	#3
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind. Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside. __________________ Because how we spend our days is, of course, how we spend our lives. -- Annie Dillard

12-06-2005, 10:11 PM	#4
madasacutsnake no more nice girl Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 5,054	he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind. Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside. Upon opening the bottle he read, "Go immediately to the fish and chip shop on the front. There you will meet a man named Marion". __________________ He really shatters the myth of white supremacy once and for all.

12-06-2005, 10:19 PM	#5
ambo feline, naturally Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: California Posts: 4,407	he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind. Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside. Upon opening the bottle he read, "Go immediately to the fish and chip shop on the front. There you will meet a man named Marion". the blood pumped in his ears as he raced past the pastel homes on the marina, the voices in his head screaming "Marion, oh Marion, WHY ?" __________________ Non-violence leads to the highest ethics, which is the goal of all evolution. Until we have not stopped to include violence as an option in our conflict management, we are still savages. --Thomas A. Edison

12-07-2005, 09:39 AM	#6
12"razormix ° ★ ° Join Date: May 2004 Location: ªs°k° Posts: 6,458	he crouched under the sagging slate-grey clouds of the estuary at low tide, watching them strech away into the gloom of the east wind. Something touched his bare foot, and looking down he saw a pale yellow bottle with a note curled up inside. Upon opening the bottle he read, "Go immediately to the fish and chip shop on the front. There you will meet a man named Marion". the blood pumped in his ears as he raced past the pastel homes on the marina, the voices in his head screaming "Marion, oh Marion, WHY ?" drawing nearer to the fish and chip shop, he recognized his son marion, leaning against the wooden pole near the entrance - "you're late again, dad, did you find my note?" Last edited by 12"razormix : 12-08-2005 at 06:58 AM. Reason: i did not pay attention...

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