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Old 10-19-2002, 08:00 PM   #1
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Anybody up for a sonnet? (One line at a time suggested)

Not sure if this will take too much work but if anyone's interested it would be fun to see what we come up with -
A sonnet (for anyone in this mostly erudite crowd who doesn't already know - and for those that do, I know there are other types of sonnets but I thought I'd stick with the English form) is a type of verse that consists of 14 lines in iambic pentameter, in this case, with a rhyme scheme of ABAB CDCD EFEF GG (or sometimes ABBA CDDC EFFE GG - with the last two lines usually being a comment on the previous 12). Shakespeare wrote a whole bunch of them, as did many other great writers & poets.
Okay, this sounds confusing, but it really isn't! "Iambic pentameter" just means that each line has 10 syllables in it, usually with the accent on every other beat (i.e., ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum), but even Shakespeare broke that rule often, and sometimes included 11 or (more rarely) 12 beats in a line. There's more, but it mostly applies to his plays, not to the sonnets.
Here's one of my favorite Shakespeare sonnets as an example - I've labeled the lines as to their rhyme scheme:

A: When in disgrace with Fortune and men's *eyes*
B: I all alone beweep my outcast *state* ,
A: And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless *cries* ,
B: And look upon myself and curse my *fate* ,

C: Wishing me like to one more rich in *hope* ,
D: Featur'd like him, like him with friends *possess'd* ,
C: Desiring this man's art, and that man's *scope* ,
D: With what I most enjoy contented *least* ;

E: Yet in these thoughts myself almost *despising* ,
F: Haply I think on thee, and then my *state*
E: (Like to the lark at break of day *arising*
F: From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven's *gate* ,

G: For thy sweet love rememb'red such wealth *brings* ,
G: That then I scorn to change my state with *kings* .

As I mentioned happens sometimes, the third & ninth lines have 11 syllables in them, but you can still say the lines so they fit the rhythm (i.e., ba-bada, ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum, and ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-bum, ba-baah-bum) - that's the key. Also, words like "beloved", "beauteous", "vanished", "cancelled" etc., can be stretched out or shortened to fit the rhythm, i.e. "belov'd" or "belov-ed", "beau-teous" or "beau-te-ous". See?
BTW - here's a great site that has lots of sonnets to read - and you can write and submit your own, too!

http://www.sonnets.org/

Okay, I'll start - one line at a time, unless you really, *really* feel the need to continue:
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In secret, I adore the sensuous line

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Old 10-19-2002, 08:12 PM   #2
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Old 10-19-2002, 08:31 PM   #3
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Old 10-22-2002, 06:32 PM   #12
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Old 10-22-2002, 11:12 PM   #15
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Wheeeeeeee!!!!!!!

That was fun!!!!!!!! Okay - someone start a new one!
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