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Old 09-04-2005, 10:07 AM   #1
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Originally Posted by edward de bono
..i decided to invent my own poetic form


  • the rhyme is a a b b

  • the first line describes some action. this action should be unexpected or bizarre enough to attract attention. the action may be performed by a known and named person. when this is the case, then the action should fit the personality. the action is fictitious and does not need to be historic.

  • the second line explains and gives the reason behind the action. this explanation should be as logical as possible. the more bizarre the action, the more logical the explanation should be.

  • the third line gives the result of the action. what happens? again, this result should follow as a logical consequence of the action.

  • the fourth and final line is a general philosophical reflection on life - but arising from the previous lines. The trick is to make the reflection follow smoothly from the action and yet be general in nature. This fourth line must be capable of standing on its own and making sense on its own.

  • example:

    i switched off my brain
    to see what I could gain.
    i lost the will to care.
    it's best to stay aware.



he shaded his eyes with a hand



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Old 09-04-2005, 01:06 PM   #2
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Old 09-04-2005, 02:16 PM   #3
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Old 09-04-2005, 02:26 PM   #4
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Old 09-04-2005, 06:50 PM   #5
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and all her old wounds would dehisce.

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