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Old 02-10-2004, 03:47 PM   #1
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Alliterative Communal Not-quite Limericks

Insipired by a happy error in the Limerick thread, I thought I'd propose the following:

Rather than follow the standard Limerick rhyming scheme of AABBA, let's rhyme the last line with the previous two for AABBB.

Here's the example from the Limerick board, penned by Tall Thin Duke, RevEf, funkytuba and yours truly.

Note that the first verse is the standard limerick rhyme; the second verse is the model for this thread.

(AABBA)
A bully named Billy from Philly
Grabbed Tim by the hair and his willy
"Your willy's so wooly!"
Said Billy so cooly
And on the spot made Tim his fillie.


(AABBB)
Disgruntled by this were Tim's folks
No joke was this bloke who Tim pokes
A felon and thug
Who fell on a butt plug
Was a thug with a plug they din't dug


AND! We'll try as much as possible for some intra-line rhyming and alliteration. (Although it's not such a hard and fast rule that we should let that dampen our creativity.)


I'll start:

Sadly, Sam sat, fat sans sari
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Old 02-10-2004, 04:07 PM   #2
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Great idea!

Sadly, Sam sat, fat sans sari
Surely he saw silly Sally
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Old 02-10-2004, 04:24 PM   #3
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Sadly, Sam sat, fat sans sari
Surely he saw silly Sally
Sad Sam sent her streudel
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Old 02-10-2004, 04:39 PM   #4
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Sadly, Sam sat, fat sans sari
Surely he saw silly Sally
Sad Sam sent her streudel
Along with her poodle
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Old 02-10-2004, 05:17 PM   #5
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Sadly, Sam sat, fat sans sari
Surely he saw silly Sally
Sad Sam sent her streudel
Along with her poodle
To art school to make poodle doodles.
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Old 02-10-2004, 09:43 PM   #6
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At art school the models are nude
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Old 02-10-2004, 10:08 PM   #7
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At art school the models are nude
They're not lewd, yet crude students are rude
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Old 02-10-2004, 10:11 PM   #8
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At art school the models are nude
They're not lewd, yet crude students are rude
I sit poised with hard chalk
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Old 02-11-2004, 12:07 AM   #9
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At art school the models are nude
They're not lewd, yet crude students are rude
I sit poised with hard chalk
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Old 02-11-2004, 12:12 AM   #10
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At art school the models are nude
They're not lewd, yet crude students are rude
I sit poised with hard chalk
but I just came to gawk
at the jock with nought but a mohawk.
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Old 02-11-2004, 01:21 AM   #11
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Old 02-11-2004, 02:30 AM   #12
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This pizza pie poses a problem
eight big pieces, share 'em or gobble 'em?
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Old 02-11-2004, 04:00 AM   #13
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This pizza pie poses a problem
eight big pieces, share 'em or gobble 'em?
the cheese is so runny
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Old 02-11-2004, 04:25 AM   #14
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This pizza pie poses a problem
eight big pieces, share 'em or gobble 'em?
the cheese is so runny
the crust so well-done-ey
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Old 02-11-2004, 04:29 AM   #15
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This pizza pie poses a problem
eight big pieces, share 'em or gobble 'em?
the cheese is so runny
the crust so well-done-ey
I'll eat it all come rain or sunny.
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