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07-05-2004, 10:55 AM
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left hanging
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07-05-2004, 10:56 AM
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a peach
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meeting you, alone
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07-05-2004, 05:53 PM
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Spone to Proonerisms
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Walking by the beach
horizon indistinct, blurred
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07-06-2004, 01:24 AM
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beatbox mantra soundtrack
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Walking by the beach
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07-06-2004, 10:35 AM
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a peach
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TAKE TWO!!
meeting you, alone
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07-06-2004, 01:36 PM
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left hanging
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meeting you, alone
I tried to sound so surprised |
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07-06-2004, 02:35 PM
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Spone to Proonerisms
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meeting you, alone
I tried to sound so surprised river merges sea
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07-06-2004, 08:09 PM
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monkey
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I was duped again
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07-07-2004, 12:03 AM
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I was duped again
I should have learned from last time |
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07-07-2004, 12:06 AM
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Spone to Proonerisms
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I was duped again
I should have learned from last time sheep encounters fence not trying to be a smartass here, but haiku generally have some reference to nature, they should give the reader a sensory feeling of presence, they are written in the abstract (i.e not about a person or about yourself), they encapsulate some relevation or greater understanding of being, and they should contain some ambiguity that leaves the reader thinking. For lala, let's try for some depth here.
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...and another handful of almonds Last edited by funkytuba : 07-07-2004 at 12:11 AM. |
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07-07-2004, 12:11 AM
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Rainy Dutch Summer
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07-07-2004, 02:52 AM
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beatbox mantra soundtrack
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Rainy Dutch Summer
the lowlands beg for sunshine |
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07-07-2004, 07:45 AM
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It's just words I write
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Rainy Dutch Summer
the lowlands beg for sunshine relax, and light a spliff |
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07-08-2004, 02:33 AM
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left hanging
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Woken by thunder
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07-08-2004, 03:13 AM
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meretricious dilettante
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Woken by thunder
Or was that a door slamming?
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