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zero · 09-04-2005, 10:07 AM

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Originally Posted by edward de bono

..i decided to invent my own poetic form

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the rhyme is a a b b

the first line describes some action. this action should be unexpected or bizarre enough to attract attention. the action may be performed by a known and named person. when this is the case, then the action should fit the personality. the action is fictitious and does not need to be historic.

the second line explains and gives the reason behind the action. this explanation should be as logical as possible. the more bizarre the action, the more logical the explanation should be.

the third line gives the result of the action. what happens? again, this result should follow as a logical consequence of the action.

the fourth and final line is a general philosophical reflection on life - but arising from the previous lines. The trick is to make the reflection follow smoothly from the action and yet be general in nature. This fourth line must be capable of standing on its own and making sense on its own.

example:

i switched off my brain
to see what I could gain.
i lost the will to care.
it's best to stay aware.

he shaded his eyes with a hand

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Marcus Bales · 09-04-2005, 01:06 PM

he shaded his eyes with a hand
he took from the corpse on the sand

trisherina · 09-04-2005, 02:16 PM

he shaded his eyes with a hand
he took from the corpse on the sand
now there'd be no more debate

Marcus Bales · 09-04-2005, 02:26 PM

he shaded his eyes with a hand
he took from the corpse on the sand
now there'd be no more debate
over who'd lost more weight

zero · 09-04-2005, 06:50 PM

anxious, early, overdressed

Marcus Bales · 09-04-2005, 07:09 PM

anxious, early, overdressed
but young and pretty, she impressed

glasshouse · 10-06-2005, 05:24 AM

I drank a gallon of milk
To test my general ilk
But it made my stomache rage
life is a digestive cage

09-04-2005, 01:06 PM	#2
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	he shaded his eyes with a hand he took from the corpse on the sand __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

09-04-2005, 02:26 PM	#4
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	he shaded his eyes with a hand he took from the corpse on the sand now there'd be no more debate over who'd lost more weight __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

09-04-2005, 07:09 PM	#6
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	anxious, early, overdressed but young and pretty, she impressed __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

10-06-2005, 05:24 AM	#7
glasshouse frustrated frustule Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: An island in the deep blue pacific. Posts: 165	One for the new form I drank a gallon of milk To test my general ilk But it made my stomache rage life is a digestive cage

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09-04-2005, 02:16 PM	#3
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	he shaded his eyes with a hand he took from the corpse on the sand now there'd be no more debate

09-04-2005, 06:50 PM	#5
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	anxious, early, overdressed