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zero 07-10-2006 09:17 AM

american sentences
 
quote=paul nelson
  • american sentences as a poetic form was allen ginsberg's effort to make american the haiku. if haiku is seventeen syllables going down in japanese text, he would make american sentences seventeen syllables going across, linear, like just about everything else in america

  • american sentences are one line, 17 syllable sentences

  • american sentences work best when there is an aha! moment and when the modifier comes in the last word, or even last syllable:

  • examples:

    four skinheads stand in the streetlight rain chatting under an umbrella.
    october 4, 1987

    outside ritzy pine street shops, two legless men among those seeking change.
    August 8, 1990

    ................................allen ginsberg

  • post as many/few words as you want as long as sentence=17syllables

  • write a "go it alone" entire sentence OR start/finish "communal" sentences - just complete any "communal" sentence before posting a "go it alone" sentence



to begin:


station café





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12"razormix 07-10-2006 09:31 AM

station café she sits wonders and stares at white walls with no meaning

Marcus Bales 07-10-2006 09:34 AM

The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain he fell madly in love.

zero 07-10-2006 11:34 AM

he was bleeding, the second man

Marcus Bales 07-10-2006 12:14 PM

It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.

trisherina 07-10-2006 12:54 PM

he was bleeding, the second man she lost her heart to that August day.

trisherina 07-10-2006 03:30 PM

Pavement reflects grey

Marcus Bales 07-10-2006 03:33 PM

I thought all the sentences had to be seventeen syllables long.

zero 07-10-2006 03:46 PM

pavements reflect grey, polkadotted with last saturday's confetti.

Ze Frank 07-10-2006 07:54 PM

Twenty thousand feet in the sky

ambo 07-10-2006 09:51 PM

Twenty thousand feet in the sky, her thoughts float out onto bloated clouds.

Marcus Bales 07-11-2006 08:35 AM

The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed.

trisherina 07-11-2006 11:45 AM

If I am out of my mind, it's all right with me, thought Moses Herzog.

Marcus Bales 07-11-2006 08:05 PM

He was born with a gift of laughter and a sense that the world was mad.

trisherina 07-11-2006 08:10 PM

They scrubbed for all they were worth but the stain


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