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zero · 07-10-2006, 09:17 AM

quote=paul nelson

american sentences as a poetic form was allen ginsberg's effort to make american the haiku. if haiku is seventeen syllables going down in japanese text, he would make american sentences seventeen syllables going across, linear, like just about everything else in america
american sentences are one line, 17 syllable sentences
american sentences work best when there is an aha! moment and when the modifier comes in the last word, or even last syllable:
examples:

four skinheads stand in the streetlight rain chatting under an umbrella.
october 4, 1987

outside ritzy pine street shops, two legless men among those seeking change.
August 8, 1990

................................allen ginsberg
post as many/few words as you want as long as sentence=17syllables
write a "go it alone" entire sentence OR start/finish "communal" sentences - just complete any "communal" sentence before posting a "go it alone" sentence

to begin:

station café

.

12"razormix · 07-10-2006, 09:31 AM

station café she sits wonders and stares at white walls with no meaning

Marcus Bales · 07-10-2006, 09:34 AM

The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain he fell madly in love.

zero · 07-10-2006, 11:34 AM

he was bleeding, the second man

Marcus Bales · 07-10-2006, 12:14 PM

It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.

trisherina · 07-10-2006, 12:54 PM

he was bleeding, the second man she lost her heart to that August day.

Marcus Bales · 07-31-2007, 01:35 PM

And his dream must have seemed so close that he could hardly fail to grasp it.

brightpearl · 07-31-2007, 05:25 PM

A bowl of fresh summer cherries lay pitted on the bedside table.

Marcus Bales · 07-31-2007, 05:43 PM

In contentment I still feel the need of some imperishable bliss.

brightpearl · 08-02-2007, 10:26 PM

It isn't enough to seek when finding what you seek will do no good.

trisherina · 08-03-2007, 12:20 AM

There is no secret, and there is no prize -- there is just another day.

Jack Flanders · 08-03-2007, 12:32 AM

Yeper!!!

T.I.P. · 08-03-2007, 06:04 PM

Yeper!!! he exclaimed when he realized that he had stepped out of bounds.

Marcus Bales · 08-03-2007, 06:38 PM

Games have rules, and that's what make them games -- the rules make it harder to do.

T.I.P. · 08-04-2007, 02:37 PM

that summer we slept in vacant lots and supped under the starlit skies

07-10-2006, 09:17 AM	#1
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	american sentences quote=paul nelson american sentences as a poetic form was allen ginsberg's effort to make american the haiku. if haiku is seventeen syllables going down in japanese text, he would make american sentences seventeen syllables going across, linear, like just about everything else in america american sentences are one line, 17 syllable sentences american sentences work best when there is an aha! moment and when the modifier comes in the last word, or even last syllable: examples: four skinheads stand in the streetlight rain chatting under an umbrella. october 4, 1987 outside ritzy pine street shops, two legless men among those seeking change. August 8, 1990 ................................allen ginsberg post as many/few words as you want as long as sentence=17syllables write a "go it alone" entire sentence OR start/finish "communal" sentences - just complete any "communal" sentence before posting a "go it alone" sentence to begin: station café . Last edited by zero : 07-10-2006 at 04:13 PM.

07-10-2006, 09:34 AM	#3
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain he fell madly in love. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-10-2006, 12:14 PM	#5
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-10-2006, 12:54 PM	#6
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	he was bleeding, the second man she lost her heart to that August day. __________________ Because how we spend our days is, of course, how we spend our lives. -- Annie Dillard

07-31-2007, 01:35 PM	#7
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	And his dream must have seemed so close that he could hardly fail to grasp it. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-10-2006, 09:31 AM	#2
12"razormix ° ★ ° Join Date: May 2004 Location: ªs°k° Posts: 6,458	station café she sits wonders and stares at white walls with no meaning

07-10-2006, 11:34 AM	#4
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	he was bleeding, the second man

07-31-2007, 05:25 PM	#8
brightpearl Rhinoceros fan Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,749	A bowl of fresh summer cherries lay pitted on the bedside table.

07-31-2007, 05:43 PM	#9
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	In contentment I still feel the need of some imperishable bliss. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

08-02-2007, 10:26 PM	#10
brightpearl Rhinoceros fan Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 8,749	It isn't enough to seek when finding what you seek will do no good.

08-03-2007, 12:20 AM	#11
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	There is no secret, and there is no prize -- there is just another day.

08-03-2007, 12:32 AM	#12
Jack Flanders landscaping is fun Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: up river and down river Posts: 4,815	Yeper!!!

08-03-2007, 06:04 PM	#13
T.I.P. balancing actor Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: america Posts: 2,706	Yeper!!! he exclaimed when he realized that he had stepped out of bounds. Last edited by T.I.P. : 08-04-2007 at 02:32 PM.

08-03-2007, 06:38 PM	#14
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	Games have rules, and that's what make them games -- the rules make it harder to do. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

08-04-2007, 02:37 PM	#15
T.I.P. balancing actor Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: america Posts: 2,706	that summer we slept in vacant lots and supped under the starlit skies Last edited by T.I.P. : 08-04-2007 at 02:39 PM.

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