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Old 07-16-2003, 11:12 AM   #796
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1. There was a young Dodger called Beale
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Old 07-16-2003, 12:27 PM   #797
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Old 07-16-2003, 12:29 PM   #798
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Old 07-16-2003, 12:33 PM   #799
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Old 07-16-2003, 12:40 PM   #800
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1. There was a young Dodger called Beale
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3. But when it came to baseballs
4. He trips and he falls
5. With a thump that the whole crowd can feel
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Old 07-16-2003, 12:41 PM   #801
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1. There was a young Dodger called Beale
2. Who could dodge both the unreal and real
3. But when it came to baseballs
4. He trips and he falls
5. And the bitching and whinning's unreal.
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Old 07-16-2003, 01:00 PM   #802
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1. We walked and we walked till our feet ached
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Old 07-16-2003, 08:55 PM   #803
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Old 07-16-2003, 08:56 PM   #804
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Scatch that forgot to rhyme

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Old 07-16-2003, 09:29 PM   #805
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Old 07-17-2003, 03:56 AM   #806
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Old 07-17-2003, 07:00 AM   #807
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1. We walked and we walked till our feet ached
2. Through the forest with child forsaked
3. We stumbled on rocks
4. We climbed over logs
5. Till the child we'd forsook was quite baked.

The purist in me at this point must make 2 points...
On rhythm:
the rhythm of line 1, and to a lesser extent line 2, was way off! It needs to have the same metre as either:
"There once was a man from Nantucket"
and
"There was a young lady named Mary"
or else
"There once was a man from Bombay"
and
"While taking the duchess to tea"
On content:
Mark Twain described a $1 Limerick as one which you cannot use in polite society, a $5 Limerick you cannot tell in front of ladies, and a $10 Limerick you cannot tell infront of anybody, even saying it to yourself should make you ashamed. At the very least, we should aim to have the last line contain such slyness that you would be uncomfortable saying it to your mother.
The only exception to this is when there is mitigating cleverness throughout the Limerick
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Old 07-17-2003, 07:20 AM   #808
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Ah, I remember the days when we tried to enforce Limerick purity....
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Old 07-17-2003, 08:36 AM   #809
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1. This is only for fun, you nutball
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Old 07-17-2003, 03:11 PM   #810
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1. This is only for fun, you nutball
2. My grandfather thinks he is so tall
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