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zero · 07-10-2006, 09:17 AM

quote=paul nelson

american sentences as a poetic form was allen ginsberg's effort to make american the haiku. if haiku is seventeen syllables going down in japanese text, he would make american sentences seventeen syllables going across, linear, like just about everything else in america
american sentences are one line, 17 syllable sentences
american sentences work best when there is an aha! moment and when the modifier comes in the last word, or even last syllable:
examples:

four skinheads stand in the streetlight rain chatting under an umbrella.
october 4, 1987

outside ritzy pine street shops, two legless men among those seeking change.
August 8, 1990

................................allen ginsberg
post as many/few words as you want as long as sentence=17syllables
write a "go it alone" entire sentence OR start/finish "communal" sentences - just complete any "communal" sentence before posting a "go it alone" sentence

to begin:

station café

.

12"razormix · 07-10-2006, 09:31 AM

station café she sits wonders and stares at white walls with no meaning

Marcus Bales · 07-10-2006, 09:34 AM

The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain he fell madly in love.

zero · 07-10-2006, 11:34 AM

he was bleeding, the second man

Marcus Bales · 07-10-2006, 12:14 PM

It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.

trisherina · 07-10-2006, 12:54 PM

he was bleeding, the second man she lost her heart to that August day.

trisherina · 07-10-2006, 03:30 PM

Pavement reflects grey

Marcus Bales · 07-10-2006, 03:33 PM

I thought all the sentences had to be seventeen syllables long.

zero · 07-10-2006, 03:46 PM

pavements reflect grey, polkadotted with last saturday's confetti.

Ze Frank · 07-10-2006, 07:54 PM

Twenty thousand feet in the sky

ambo · 07-10-2006, 09:51 PM

Twenty thousand feet in the sky, her thoughts float out onto bloated clouds.

Marcus Bales · 07-11-2006, 08:35 AM

The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed.

trisherina · 07-11-2006, 11:45 AM

If I am out of my mind, it's all right with me, thought Moses Herzog.

Marcus Bales · 07-11-2006, 08:05 PM

He was born with a gift of laughter and a sense that the world was mad.

trisherina · 07-11-2006, 08:10 PM

They scrubbed for all they were worth but the stain

07-10-2006, 09:17 AM	#1
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	american sentences quote=paul nelson american sentences as a poetic form was allen ginsberg's effort to make american the haiku. if haiku is seventeen syllables going down in japanese text, he would make american sentences seventeen syllables going across, linear, like just about everything else in america american sentences are one line, 17 syllable sentences american sentences work best when there is an aha! moment and when the modifier comes in the last word, or even last syllable: examples: four skinheads stand in the streetlight rain chatting under an umbrella. october 4, 1987 outside ritzy pine street shops, two legless men among those seeking change. August 8, 1990 ................................allen ginsberg post as many/few words as you want as long as sentence=17syllables write a "go it alone" entire sentence OR start/finish "communal" sentences - just complete any "communal" sentence before posting a "go it alone" sentence to begin: station café . Last edited by zero : 07-10-2006 at 04:13 PM.

07-10-2006, 09:34 AM	#3
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	The first time Yossarian saw the chaplain he fell madly in love. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-10-2006, 12:14 PM	#5
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-10-2006, 12:54 PM	#6
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	he was bleeding, the second man she lost her heart to that August day. __________________ Because how we spend our days is, of course, how we spend our lives. -- Annie Dillard

07-10-2006, 03:33 PM	#8
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	I thought all the sentences had to be seventeen syllables long. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-10-2006, 09:31 AM	#2
12"razormix ° ★ ° Join Date: May 2004 Location: ªs°k° Posts: 6,458	station café she sits wonders and stares at white walls with no meaning

07-10-2006, 11:34 AM	#4
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	he was bleeding, the second man

07-10-2006, 03:30 PM	#7
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	Pavement reflects grey

07-10-2006, 03:46 PM	#9
zero ª ★ ª Join Date: May 2004 Location: lª m°°n Posts: 13,853	pavements reflect grey, polkadotted with last saturday's confetti. Last edited by zero : 07-10-2006 at 05:10 PM.

07-10-2006, 07:54 PM	#10
Ze Frank Comedian Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: In a van down by the river Posts: 168	Twenty thousand feet in the sky

07-10-2006, 09:51 PM	#11
ambo feline, naturally Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: California Posts: 4,407	Twenty thousand feet in the sky, her thoughts float out onto bloated clouds. __________________ Non-violence leads to the highest ethics, which is the goal of all evolution. Until we have not stopped to include violence as an option in our conflict management, we are still savages. --Thomas A. Edison

07-11-2006, 08:35 AM	#12
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	The man in black fled across the desert, and the gunslinger followed. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-11-2006, 11:45 AM	#13
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	If I am out of my mind, it's all right with me, thought Moses Herzog.

07-11-2006, 08:05 PM	#14
Marcus Bales ________________ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a coign of the cliff between lowland and highland, at the sea-down's edge between windward and lee, walled round with rocks as an inland island, the ghost of a garden fronts the sea. Posts: 8,967	He was born with a gift of laughter and a sense that the world was mad. __________________ My strength is as the strength of eight -- My heart is nearly pure.

07-11-2006, 08:10 PM	#15
trisherina meretricious dilettante Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 11,068	They scrubbed for all they were worth but the stain

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